http://dual-worlds.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] dual-worlds.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] damned_lounge 2009-10-14 01:33 am (UTC)

sdkljflkdsjfklsdf COURT, I think I read this at least three times 'cause I'm so floored at how amazingly well you pulled this off. Even though you mentioned that the pon farr plot device is used a lot in fics, I think you managed to make it work really well here because of the brilliant way you tied Sylar's motivations into everything. I'm really glad you wrote it from his POV because it really cues you into why he'd agreed to help Spock out. Not only that, but getting brief glimpses of Spock's vulnerability and uncertainty from the outside was a really nice touch. And with the way Sylar felt empowered by all of that? Damn, I wound up feeling really bad for Spock, LOL.

ALSO, I liked the inclusion of the koon-ut-so'lik thing and how you went about it. It seemed fitting that something so important would go by quick for someone who didn't really understand it that well.

And did I mention how believable this is? Seriously, if Spock went through pon farr in-game, I could easily see something like this happening, LOL. Now I keep wondering about what kinds of long-term consequences all of this would have, hahah.

Anyway, thanks so much for writing this and sharing it! It was fantastic! 8D ...I'd put a bunch of hearts, but I think Erin's heart chain wins by default.

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