I both enjoy and cringe when reading something like this, with all the misunderstandings and misinterpretations flying everywhere while everyone is simultaneously trying to keep their cool. It's a pretty hilarious situation and I think it turned out wonderfully! 8D
You handled all of the characters awesomely, and the switching around of POV wasn't confusing in the slightest. If anything, it really helped the fic and I liked it a lot. ♥
I love that Ilia was trying to get Guy and Claude together, too. That's a really adorable idea, especially considering Claude is her son. You have that undertone of "I want my kid to be with a good guy" ... even though she has no clue that she's related to Claude. x)
Also, the cabbage. That really was one of the best parts. I felt really bad for Guy in this situation, but I think the way you portrayed him trying to keep his cool and mediate it all worked out pretty nicely.
So yes, this is just a great mishmash of things going terribly wrong that was a pleasure to read! It's just a shame we can't mess around like this in Damned itself. ;__;
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I both enjoy and cringe when reading something like this, with all the misunderstandings and misinterpretations flying everywhere while everyone is simultaneously trying to keep their cool. It's a pretty hilarious situation and I think it turned out wonderfully! 8D
You handled all of the characters awesomely, and the switching around of POV wasn't confusing in the slightest. If anything, it really helped the fic and I liked it a lot. ♥
I love that Ilia was trying to get Guy and Claude together, too. That's a really adorable idea, especially considering Claude is her son. You have that undertone of "I want my kid to be with a good guy" ... even though she has no clue that she's related to Claude. x)
Also, the cabbage. That really was one of the best parts. I felt really bad for Guy in this situation, but I think the way you portrayed him trying to keep his cool and mediate it all worked out pretty nicely.
So yes, this is just a great mishmash of things going terribly wrong that was a pleasure to read! It's just a shame we can't mess around like this in Damned itself. ;__;